Thread:CureHibiki/@comment-27525472-20170321095041/@comment-25034020-20170322074534

Drink some water!!!

Welp, so I did some more and created a thesis and main argument for the first paragraph:

''[THESIS FOR 1ST PARAGRAPH] Graffiti is commonly considered by most of society to be an act of vandalism that deliberately damages public or private properties, however, if looked at in a different light, it can be seen as art. [MAIN ARGUMENT] If graffiti is labelled as vandalism for taking up space in public or private properties, then ads are just as bad. But putting that aside, art can be used to show us another side to this world, both good or bad, which is exactly what graffiti can do if seen in the right light.''

It's not supposed to flow, as this research project is just to see what your ideas are and what you should change, I suppose. Just wanted to see if you think it sounds strong or too weak.