Thread:CureHibiki/@comment-27525472-20170321095041/@comment-25034020-20170322090949

You're welcome.

I also noticed that you tend to write really short and uncomplicated sentences which makes you use "desu" far too much which sounds very repetitive. If you combined some, they'll sound more complicated and like you know your stuff. So for example, you could combine 今日は、i☆Ris について話します. and i☆Ris は人気なアイドルグループです. and make them become one long, complicated sentence: 今日は、人気なアイドルグループi☆Risについて話します. As you can see, I combined them together!

Another sentence you can combine are these two sentences as well: i☆Ris のみなさんもせいゆうです. and ２０１２年に始まりました. and make them become one sentence by removing one hiragana character: i☆Ris のみなさんもせいゆうで、２０１２年に始まりました. Can you guess who I got rid of? XD

You could also combine these two sentences, i☆Ris の音楽はポップです. and たとえば、「Re:Call」と「Shining Star」はi☆Ris の歌です. but I'll leave that up to you to figure out how to ;)