Thread:CureHibiki/@comment-34958913-20160812084318/@comment-25034020-20160904085517

Kind of? I need some advice on this huge paragraph:

''Sola yawns but tries to keep her eyes open as Solu tells her about his job. But it was too difficult for her to keep her eyes open. "~lala" she murmurs to herself, feeling her head fall onto the soft ground. She finds herself staring at two older birds who are looking down on her, with their beaks moving but no words coming out. She tilts her head in confusion when she feels a tear stream down her face. She turns away but falls off the tree. She tries to make use of her pink tinted wings but nothing happens and she hits the gravel hard. She cries out in pain but manages to get up and run as fast as her small legs could go so she can get as far away as she could get from those birds. She wasn't exactly sure how long it had been since she fell from the tree but she slowed down when she saw an opening in a mountain. She approaches it slowly and tries to remember what it was called. A "cave"! That's it! But one of those birds said that she shouldn't walk into "caves". What was she thinking? She wasn't listening to them anymore! She walks into the dark "cave". She couldn't see a thing and her eyes weren't adjusting. She continues to walk further into the cave when she hears things scurrying around her. She jumps then whimpers and dashes through the cave and when she makes it out, she looks behind her to see a hoard of black creatures chasing her. She squeals and runs faster than she had ever done in her short life before. Just as the creatures pounce on her, she opens her eyes to see Solu staring at her, looking worried. "Are you okay ~lulu?". She shakes her head, trying to figure out why she had a dream of what happened before she met Solu. Solu wraps a sky blue wings around her and draws her closer to him. "It's okay ~lulu! I will protect you from your nightmares ~lulu!" he says. She smiles. "How ~lala?" she says curiously. He doesn't say anything so she just closes her eyes but she sees the creatures again and she whimpers. "You're bad at protecting me from my nightmares ~lala..." she said softly. Solu stills says nothing and she starts to panic, only to realise that he had fell asleep. She cries softly to herself, somehow falling asleep without realising it.''